Tripped into time

I tripped, fell off the ladder. I don’t remember anything else. It was all fuzzy. Though everything started to come back, slowly. I was on the same street with the same houses but something felt different. The people. They were all dressed different. They were dressed in costumes of birds of all colors, brown included, animals, even fish. There was a fully grown man with a professional briefcase in a goldfish costume!! Then the man lifted off the ground and flew to work. I was amazed. I had to get out of this place. I got up and looked around. I am so clumsy. I fell again down, down, down.

2 thoughts on “Tripped into time”

  1. Hi Natalie,

    I love the juxtaposition (contrast) of the sensible businessman with his briefcase and his being dressed in a goldfish costume! You’ve also used a variety of sentence lengths to control the pace of the reader and add drama to your writing. Can you think of a way you could use punctuation -ellipsis, perhaps? – to extend this even further?

    Thank you for entering the 100WC!
    Best wishes,
    Mel Wells (Team 100)
    Somerset, UK

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