I fell. Down. Into space. Somewhere. I have no idea where. I am clueless. Until…….
“Honey, be careful of the giant cup. It fell last night.” my mother warned me before I set out for school. I thought my mom was going completely crazy until I saw it with my own eyes. I walked towards it, running my fingers on the edge. I looked inside and all around. Nothing. I stepped inside and felt myself whisked away into a world of nowhere. I fell into darkness. Into a world of something else. Though the worst thing about all this was, I was falling upside down with my underwear showing. Sigh.
Well done on your writing Natalie.
You wrote a very good story with only 100 words based on a weird and curious picture.
I really like the imaginative idea in your story and your interesting way of telling it ! Great opening – really grabbed my attention and you kept me interested until the end, where you had a great twist !
Your writing is well organised and you’ve done really well with all the events in it. I really liked the very short or 1 word sentences – great at grabbing attention. Looking forward to reading your writing in the future.
Keep up the good work !
Shane, Teacher
Dublin, Ireland
(Team 100
I wonder where you went, and so unfortunate to fall with you underwear on display! I really enjoyed reading this blog.
The end of your writing made me laugh out loud. I was expecting you to take me on a journey to the underworld. What a clever twist!
Loved your writing and your comment about your underwear made me laugh.
Next time maybe a bit more punction.