The Box

” I have to go now my little sister is waiting for me.” I said to Lila. I walked out of school to find my sister her name is Ocean and by the way my name is Pacific. When I found my sister and we walked back home I saw a package addressed to me waiting at my doorstep.” When did it arrive?” I said to my mum.” I’m not sure too honey.” Mum replied.  That’s weird I thought I went into my room and opened the box and surprisingly I found a stray kitten. I decided to name it Caramel. She lived with us happily ever after.

6 thoughts on “The Box”

  1. Hi Nean, I really liked your piece! I liked how your topic is how you found a stray kitten named caramel. One thing that you could work on is the sentence.” When I found my sister and we walked back home I saw a package addressed to me waiting at my doorstep.” the part that you could work on is getting rid of and it would look like this “When I found my sister, we walked back home and I saw a package addressed to me waiting at my doorstep.”
    From Gweneth in Ill

  2. Very good story, well described, I can picture everything in my head. Very good use of this prompt keep up the great stories

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